Blog 28

Evaluating Final Draft

Focus (45 points)
I clearly state my research question and the importance of the research in the last paragraph of my introduction. I also concluded its importance in my conclusion and used the information from my introduction in my conclusion. I present clear statements of my data throughout my essay and many times refer back to my literature review when making comparisons. I set up background information in my introduction about what Facebook initially is and what many people use it for while also introducing the idea of using it to help you with class assignments. The data presented in my connected to my focus and I refer back to a lot of it throughout my paper. Earned: 42
Audience/genre (40 points)
I feel that my opening statement in the introductions draws the readers attention. I also gave each section a catchy title to engage the reader. The language I used was formal yet relaxed and I feel that the reader will have an easy time understanding my paper. I also referred back to the two sample research papers on the blog to ensure that my presentation of the writing was acceptable. Earned: 40
Organization (30 points)
I feel that my overall organization was written well. My data was presented in the right places and given explicit detail. One idea always leads to the next one Each opening to my sections are clear and gives the reader an idea of what will be discussed in that section. I used code words throughout my paper when referring to aspects of Facebook language. I made clear headings to let the reader know what to expect in that section. Earned: 25
Development (30 points)
The details from the data I feel support what I am trying to prove. The examples used show how different forms of using Facebook for class assignments work and people need to do in order for it to be effective or not. I feel that my discussion is connected to my research throughout my paper based on my findings and how it related.My discussion was in-depth and gave good insight to different views. Earned: 28
Correctness (5 points)
My writing is clear and all periods, punctuation and quotations are in the correct places. Earned: 5

Total points: 140/150

Criteria: Data and Analysis (200 points)

Blog 24 and 26
I feel that my analysis of my data was clear and fit in with my research question. I believe that between my interview and my observation of direct data I had enough to prove the point that I was trying to make. While looking at my data I discovered new ideas and ways to prove how your interaction on Facebook affects the result that you are looking for. Most of my data connected to my research question. The only thing I had to change was the excerpt of the interview I wanted to use. After writing out my literature review I felt that it would have been most useful to use the excerpt of my interview that talked about what my literature review talked about because my other data did not look into that aspect of Facebook. The three blogs listed give the most in depth look into my process of analysis.

Total points: 180/200
I gave myself this grade because although I feel that I did have enough data to prove my point it was presented rather jumpy on paper. I would have liked it to flow better but I could not think of any other way for it to flow as smooth as I wanted to. However, I feel that each section of my data gives a clear analysis and that is what I intended I wish there was a way that I could have made it flow better without jumping from one topic to another.

Criteria: Writing Process (150 points)

Blog 25 and 27
The blogs above are the only blogs I used to promote my writing process in the last 2 weeks. Throughout the writing process in class however, I found that I was writing many different draft until the very end when I finally put everything together. When you look through my blog dating back from within the last month you see the progress I made throughout time. The quality of my writing definitely increased as I got a better understanding of what was expected of this essay. Another aspect that increased my writing was working on one section at a time. I feel that by doing this decreased my anxiety of having to get more than one section completed by the due date.

Total points: 140/150
I gave myself this grade because I believe that throughout my writing process of this project I grew as a writer. I deducted 10 points because I feel that I could have written more blogs that demonstrated my writing process but overall I feel that my writing process proved to work and made an effective paper.

460/500: I gave myself this grade because I believe I gave a clear and informative analysis and answered the question posed in the introductions in more ways than one. I worked really hard to make this paper flow and make sense to the reader and tried to make it interesting and attention grabbing. I proved my point based on my data and did a good job at referring back to my literature review when needed. Although it was not perfect I believe I did the best that I could do and wrote an effective paper.